Alex Jones rough draft

[alexj]

If your neighbor robs a store, should you get in trouble? If a kid you know from school gets ion a car accident, should you loose your driver's license. I intend to prove that the driving age should not be changed to 18. Changing the driving age to 18 would be very inconvenient for kids who need to get themselves to places.
Some families rely on their 17 year olds to drive younger siblings places they need to go, run errands, or to get themselves to an after school activity or a job they might have. If a kid does a sport after school,but the sport is later on in the night,when his or her parents are working and they are seventeen, they should be able to drive them self there.If the driving age gets raised to 18 parents would have to keep driving their kids around for an extra year. This is a pain for adults to keep driving their kids back and forth to different places. It becomes a hassle for parents, a hassle that does not have to happen.
If the legislature changes the driving age to 18, then 18 year olds will be the inexperienced ones. It will be the same thing that is going on now with 16 and 17 year olds but with 18 year olds instead. It would not make any sense to add another year of waiting for ,possibly, 17 year olds.
As of now, kids go for their permit when they are 16 years of age. You don't have to get your permit right away, but you have to obtain your permit for 6 months, and have to be driving with someone that is 21 or older that has had their license for 3 years or more. Within those 6 months to 1 year, that driver teaches you a safe and defensive way of driving, as ell as you gaining experience within that time.

[barryrubino]

We agree with the central idea that the driving age should not be changed to 18. By changing the driving age to 18, it puts more pressure on the parents of these kids to escourt them from place to place. You should include more examples of how this would affect both the children and the guardians. An example would be that a parent would have to leave work early to drive their kid which would lose them money. Also talk about whether or not the experience behind the wheel of a car would be affected between the ages of 17 or 18. Your introduction is weak. You need to include strionger reasons to why people should agreee with your argument. You seem to be interested in this topic but do not include ways to make people disagree with the legislature. You do not have great body paragraphs. Add more details and real life experiences. Your conclusion is non-existent. Make a strong closing to support your body and introduction. Good Luck, Alex Holder, Barry Rubino

[maxdoelling]

I agree that the driving age should not be increased. By the time you are 18 most kids have a job, maybe going to college, and finding their own place to stay. You need to be somewhat of a good driver by that age already if you are going to be drving everywhere.